thanks raj
madhvi

Lovely lines and befitting the two great women in our bhakti tradition

thanks palahali for nice comments
 Madhvi

Dr Madhvi

Very nice. Radha is an enigma in our myths. As you say - wondering whether we will ever meet .. Regards

Thanks sootradhaar
 yes the last lines look better...actually I added these lines now , because this poem I wrote when I was only eighteen...
You may read a few more of my poems in hindi in my blogs...perhaps you missed them
 thanks a lot
 Madhvi

Doctor Saahiba....
...Hindi main aap ki pahli rachna dekh raha hoon .....Jahaan taq meri yaad-daasht hai...
Aap ne Khoobsoorat pryaas kiyaa hai....Bhaav tao ache hain hi...Geet Main thodi si tarashna baaki rah gayaa baaki Khoobsoorat ban pada hai...
Udaaharan-Swaroop Aaakhiri ki Do Line Sudhaar kar likh raha hoon...Wo bhi Isliye kyon ki log kahne lagte hain ...Kyaa Galti thi bata tao dete...

   " Doli phirti thi Radha Ban-Ban
        Ab Phirti hoon Radha jaisee "
Regards
Shootradhaar !
      

thanks komlet..glad you liked hindi version...i like that too.

 madhvi

thanks anneshwa...so your hindi is improving

 madhvi

Dr.Madhavi, kya sunder kaha aapne....van van doli phirti thi radha...ab phirti hu meera jaisi....bahut hi man ko chhu gayi aapki ye kavita.........both english and hindi are enchanting but i loved the rythemic flow of hindi wali.........

The Hindi one is more sweet.........though I'm happy that you've posted the english version.Great poetry, anyway.......